Feedback Requested
Anne Frank
Been away for a while reading many books and reviewing them. Never seems to be enough time in the day. So, one of the first books I read was the complete and unabridged 'The Diary of Anne Frank'. Who has read any of the other versions of this book for school or just interested in the history of the time. I have read many versions of this book that I could find, and I found this version of this 'autobiography' at a local bookstore on the bargain table and something told to buy. This version has each entry that Anne writes starting with 'Dear Kitty' for Anne wanted it to seem as if she were writing and talking to a friend. This is a diary of a young girl that had to grow up too fast and to try and understand all the changes that she was starting to notice about herself and all the others around her. Who really can understand these happenings along with what happening in the world at their time of living life.
By Mark Graham2 years ago in Critique
Critique Requested: "The Kelpie"
Begging for critique! Overall, I like The Kelpie, but the opening of Part One feels rambling and completely all over the place. It needs toightening, and I'm floundering. Which bits would you cut? Is there anything that pulls you out of the story? Does it matter that I haven't named the town or village where she lives? Is that a flaw?
By L.C. Schäfer2 years ago in Critique
Catching Up!?
Catching Up to me means-- reading and reviewing several books that I have received and read, and due to the holidays, having a stomach virus with fever and a bad cold on top of that it was hard to keep up with the writing. Also, I have been having internet and computer issues as well. I have finished reading many books that I reviewed and writing in my notebooks my outlines. I have finished 98% of my household chores inside and outside, but the winds lately keep blowing leaves into piles to clean up.
By Mark Graham2 years ago in Critique
Critiques Needed: First pages of Project Styx. Top Story - January 2024. Content Warning.
Authors note: I would like constructive critiques on the first pages of a sci-fi fantasy book I am working on. I would like to know first impressions and things that need to be worked on. This is so I can get an idea of what an agent or editor might think. I also know that this is long—no need to read the whole thing, in fact, tell me when you lose interest.
By K. Kocheryan2 years ago in Critique
Navigating the Storm: The Timeless Debate on India's Uniform Civil Code
William Carlos famously said, "Time is a storm in which we are all lost." This quote fits with the timing and situation with which the Uniform Civil Code has been brought up into the limelight. It seemed an impetuous and nimble idea to prompt a heated discussion about UCC. The tenor of various religious leaders and politicians changed when the "Law Commission of India" announced to enlighten itself with the advice of all people of India regarding UCC.
By Bhavishya Goswami2 years ago in Critique
Justice or Discrimination
In the new year, the castigation of Indian laws vis-a-vis the laws that try to alleviate the circumstances by commiserating with women has increased. The enlightenment of this discrimination, as referred to by some people, is taking a fillip among the masses, especially in youth through socio-legal influencers such as Amish Aggarwala. There is nothing wrong with it but reverberating the same point makes the whole idea of amending the laws for better equality defunct as the people prima facie abominate the whole apparatus of the judicial system with a knee-jerk reaction. And this surely creaks the people’s trust in our independent judiciary which has made many precedents of ensuring equality.
By Bhavishya Goswami2 years ago in Critique
Two Female Coming-of-Agers
If you've ever so much as glanced over my writing on Vocal, you'll agree there's quite a good deal of coming-of-age in there. However, you'll probably also agree it seems to be written exclusively from a male perspective. The following plea for feedback was prompted by my friend Staringale, who read and gave me some very kind comments on one of the few exceptions to the above rule. This in turn started me thinking about the general absence of female coming-of-age tales within my body of work.
By Doc Sherwood2 years ago in Critique
